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DragonSpark – Speakeasy 162 – Terror in the Dark

19 May

Until the day I die, I’ll never forget those glassy, unblinking eyes. Before me was the body of a running man, his motion frozen in time. He was now a fragile, lifeless statue, his once opaque body now translucent. Terror was the only thing expressed by the man’s facial features. A SoulEater was near.
I contoured the crystal statue and walked further into the cave’s open chamber. A stream of light poured in from a narrow crack in the ceiling, maybe 60 feet above me, probably more. This lone, distant source of light gave the chamber an eerie mood. The air within was cold, still. I felt a tingle of fear in my spine. “The artefact had to be here of all places”, I thought as I tugged my cloak around me, “A SoulEater’s den.”
On the opposite side of the chamber, a massive, ancient structure had been built along the inner wall of the cave. Most of the chamber’s floor was occupied by a lake, traversed by a lone path, splitting the body of water in two. To either side of the path, the water was pierced by high stony spikes, as if two giant hedgehogs were slumbering beneath the surface.
I lit a ball of fire on the tip of my index and made my way across. Halfway through, I felt a subtle shift in the air immediately behind me. I turned around, and found myself face to face with the empty cavern. Tense moments followed. All of those who had seen a SoulEater and had lived to tell the tale had died shortly after, in a state of lunacy.
All of my senses were alert, scouting the darkness in front of me for movement, for a presence. My hood was restricting my peripheral vision but taking it off would break my concentration. After a couple seconds, the tension started to fade. The movement I had sensed was probably just a stray air current. I breathed a sigh of what seemed like relief and turned around….
​….And found myself staring into four green, glowing eyes.
I recoiled back, kicking the creature away from me. It shrieked in response, in a way I would have never imagined a living thing capable, its body thrashing about on the floor. I could not make out the shape of it clearly. It seemed humanoid, yet its neck seemed too flexible, its arms too long, the legs supporting its frame articulated in a strange way. Within seconds it was standing again, ready to attack.
I thrust balls of energy in the thing’s direction. It dogged by jumping high in the cavern. As it landed, it slashed at my cloak, trying to grab it. It took the cumbersome thing off and threw it in the creature’s direction.
The heavy fabric exploded in mid-air. I shielded my eyes. The distinguishable sound of glass shattering echoed through the room. I lowered my arms only to see the creature still before me, the thing that had been my cloak lay on the floor in one thousand different, crystal-like pieces.
The fight had been a short one, yet I was out of breath. The very air in this chamber seemed to be sapping my strength. The creature then pounced in my direction. Time slowed down. It was in the air. Its trajectory could not be changed. It couldn’t dodge. I put my hands before me and used the last of my strengths to fire an intense missile of magic at the beast, transpiercing it.
It fell to my feet, dead. I knelt on the stone floor, exhausted. As I gazed at the thing’s dimming blue eyes, I felt relief wash over my body.
Wait a second…..Blue?
I jerked myself back onto my feet. Before me was the first creature, its green eyes peering into my soul. A bestial roar resonated in my ears. It came from my left. I turned to face the sound to find that on top of every spike in the water stood a SoulEater, their glowing eyes varying in color, like brushstrokes on a terrifying canvas. Another inhuman sound radiated behind me. I turned around only to witness a similar sight. Maybe 40 SoulEaters were gazing at me with their terrifying eyes.
I delved into my body for my magic but found only petrifying fear. I darted towards the ruins at the end of the path, my legs powered by terror.
Roars echoed in the chamber as the beast shot towards their desperate prey.

 

…………………………………………………sodragonsparkdidhisownsubtextthistimebuthedidnotunfortunatelydohisowndotswhichareveryannoyingtodoonmyphonesoyoucanhavetextinstead…………………………..

So this is the first time I actualy WRITE this little subtext, as it seems to be a sort of tradition (at least for the fictional posts) on this here blog AND the first time I actualy submit something to Yeahwrite (I’m feeling a mix of dread and pride as I write these words). I don’t know if you guys have read the “about us” page of this blog (most of you have etter things to do) so you might not know that I am as green as grass when it comes to writting. Feedback is greatly apreciated, good or bad, and I hope you enjoyed this little tale of mine. I would like to dedicate this post to my new writting partner and friend AKA imab00kworm and to the mysterious Joetwo, who has systematicaly liked most of our posts. You sir are amazing
DragonSpark

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26 responses to “DragonSpark – Speakeasy 162 – Terror in the Dark

  1. imab00kworm

    20 May 2014 at 16:51

    Just to say, it’s not really “tradition”, sometimes I like to ‘explain’ what I wrote and sometimes I just like to ramble… but some texts can stand on their own, especially poems

     
  2. tinkerbelle96

    20 May 2014 at 20:16

    Your story had me hooked from beginning to end! I’m fascinated by the world you created.Amazing job 🙂

     
    • DragonSpark

      20 May 2014 at 20:28

      Thank you for your time and thank you for the praise. I know I don’t stand much of a chance against the likes of you and others but I hope my modest tale will add to the greater light of Yeahwrite, like a Spark in a roaring fire of skill and creativity.

       
      • tinkerbelle96

        20 May 2014 at 20:39

        Everyone stands a good chance here 🙂 and your piece was very innovative. I hope you participate in future challenges at the speakeasy, I’d love to read more from you.

         
  3. jannatwrites

    21 May 2014 at 04:24

    You had my heart pounding! I’m such a chicken, there is no artifact I’d want badly enough to trek into a SoulEater’s den to find it 🙂

     
    • DragonSpark

      21 May 2014 at 16:48

      Thank you, that means alot coming from you Janna.

       
  4. tedstrutz

    21 May 2014 at 08:47

    That was tense!

     
    • tedstrutz

      21 May 2014 at 08:49

      p.s. what was the artifact?

       
      • DragonSpark

        21 May 2014 at 16:51

        Well first of all thank you for the compliment.
        So in the first version of this story, the character was going to retrive the artifact (Was probs’ gonna be a sword or weapon of some kind) in a sort of throne room. Behind the pedistal/throne was going to be the painting, with a SoulEater behind it. Cue the battle scene. The artefact was going to be the SoulEaters weakness. SOI blame the sad ending on word count!

         
  5. Suzanne

    21 May 2014 at 18:02

    This is great! I love how fast-paced the fight scene is – and I love the whole idea of SoulEaters. Great take on the prompts! 🙂

     
    • DragonSpark

      21 May 2014 at 18:08

      Thank you very much, for everything. Actualy they were called Soul Eaters ar first but I had to condense it for the sake of word count.

       
  6. Meg

    22 May 2014 at 03:34

    What a great job you did setting the scene. I could picture it perfectly.

     
    • DragonSpark

      22 May 2014 at 07:59

      Thank you. The praise is much apreciated. I’m afraid I don’t have a very god way with words as of right now, so I’ll probably focus on “visual” scenes before trying to explore other senses or trying to convey subtle emotions in a good way.

       
      • DragonSpark

        22 May 2014 at 08:53

        Wow awesomest typo ever. Meant to say “good” not “god”. My ego isn’t THAT big, I promess 😉

         
  7. DragonSpark

    22 May 2014 at 08:57

    *promise

     
  8. atrm61

    22 May 2014 at 11:33

    Loved this fantasy filled tale ,packed with lightning fast action and heart stopping tense moments:-)Keep writing,this is very,very good!

     
    • DragonSpark

      22 May 2014 at 16:01

      Why thank you, although I must admit that the “fast action” was mostly didctated upon me by the word count limit (which has already influenced the original plot). I had to cut out half the original battle during the editing of the final thing so that I could better describe the SoulEaters and the cave chamber…I was lucky that it came out as “packed with lightning fast action and heart stopping tense moments” (Although I suspect that you are flattering me right there (or maybe the whole thing is suprising if you discover it for the first time. “It’s all about perspective” my art teacher used to say. Guess she was right…))
      Anyways thank you for your time and i’m glad you enjoyed it.

       
      • atrm61

        22 May 2014 at 16:22

        🙂

         
      • imab00kworm

        22 May 2014 at 17:06

        Of course you find your writing not as good as it is but I can certify there was no flattery 🙂

         
  9. Kathy Combs (@Kathy29156)

    22 May 2014 at 15:07

    Intense. I enjoyed the fantasy world you created.

     
    • DragonSpark

      22 May 2014 at 16:10

      I’m glad that you did Mrs Combs.
      As mentioned above (and in our fantastic “About us” page (if you’re interested in reading more(self promo!))) I am more interested in writing tales that tell epic (literaly) stories. I ain’t very good with the more subtle “average joe” or “everyday hero” kind of plots. As they say in France (not) “go big or go home!”

       
  10. Ann Bennett

    22 May 2014 at 17:00

    That was quick and intense. Souleaters are not to be trifled with. Take care.

     
    • DragonSpark

      22 May 2014 at 18:32

      Thank you for your time. The praise is much apreciated. I hope to see you around here soon.

       
  11. Abhilasha S.

    21 June 2014 at 07:39

    Wow! This was amazingly written. It got me hooked till the end.

     
    • DragonSpark

      21 June 2014 at 10:27

      I doubt you’ll ever see this answer, but thank you nonetheless for reading. I’m glad you liked it.

       

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