DS YW176- Desolation

25 Aug

Everything hurt. It seemed every nerve in my body felt like the best way to hurry me back to consciousness was to scream pain at my brain. The cockpit was mostly intact, but the sheer strength of the impact is what got me. As I looked to my right, I notice my peripheral monitor was shattered. At least that explained why the right side of my body was covered in blood. Shrapnel is the bane of mechanised armour.

Heartbeat- slow. Pilot has regained consciousness.

I grunted as I sat back in my seat. No time to waste. I brought a status report of my mech up on the screen. Looks like I wasn’t the only one in bad shape. Hydraulics for the right leg were badly damaged, perhaps beyond repair. The left arm was basically torn off. Thrusters won’t be able to reach maximum efficiency. At least there were no leaks. Thank god there were no leaks.

As far as weapons went, my rifle was god knows where, my assault knives forgotten in the armoury during the scramble, and my magnum was low on ammo. The only weapons that were still fully operational were the wrist mounted light machine guns. Talk about firepower. I turned on the main camera, grabbed the joysticks, and powered my robotic armoured suit back to life. I felt my eyes widen, as the rest of my body froze in a mix of surprise and terror. Suddenly, I wished I hadn’t turned the camera on. To say the moon base was annihilated would have been an understatement. Those bastards took a whole chunk of the moon with them. All that was left of the sprawling military complex was a couple floating rocks. In the lunar sky, cadavers of ships where slowly drifting down to the surface. Hundreds, if not thousands of destroyed mechs lay on the surface, lifeless. A quick glimpse at the comms told me I had lost the signal of all my squad, including Commander Carter, as well as mission HQ. The sensors couldn’t pick up a friendly signal for hundreds of kilometre. I had been very lucky.

Heartbeat- normal. Pilot focused.

I threw my mech into combat speed, pushing what was left of the thrusters to their limit. Unable to achieve flight, I found myself leaping from crater to crater, some of them eons old, some very recent. I was headed for the equatorial comms relay. Earth had to know something had attacked us, clearly with the intent of leaving no survivors. They had taken us by surprise, and had the ability to do so again. The distance to cross was phenomenal, but despite missing some thrust, space armours were fast. The sophisticated inertial dampeners and the genetic modifications I had received at birth easily allowed me to surpass sonic speed, without turning me into a milkshake.

Heartbeat- fast. Adrenaline levels rising

The situation didn’t improve though. As I got further away from the battle field, the sky began to clear. The Earth was piercing the horizon. My sensors were able to extend their reach, no longer impeded by the leftovers of the battle. Quickly, my radar started to send alerts to me. I was picking up a number of large heat sources between me and the Earth. I focused my sensors on it. The image appeared on my screen. My blood froze in my veins.

Thousands, if not tens of thousands of huge ships doted the sky, their silhouette invisible without a filter. They were headed to earth at battle speed. Their architecture wasn’t earth-like. They could not have been built under the constraints of gravity. This wasn’t a rebellion from the colonies. No. This was a full-fledged invasion force.



Man what a great summer. It’s good to be back, though. To start the school year off with a bang, here is a quick sci-fi piece, stepping away from the action heavy pieces and trying something a bit more on the descriptive end of the spectrum. Hope you enjoyed! Comments, criticism, random thoughts, and advice is welcome!


Posted by on 25 August 2014 in Dragonspark, Speakeasy


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16 responses to “DS YW176- Desolation

  1. glasgowdragonfly

    26 August 2014 at 11:24

    I love your comment – more on the sci-fi, less on the action! This piece is as face paced and action packed as ever. I’m actually running out of ways to pay you compliments week on week. Have you ever tried converting any of your posts into script format? I can see them potentially working well on screen or as a video game trailer. Enjoyed reading!

    • DragonSpark

      27 August 2014 at 21:02

      Well, 95% of my stuff comes from a visual sequence in my mind. I might publish them if I can get regular access to a scanner, but many of the elements of my stories are sketches I make (here the armoured robot suit for example). It could be fun to write screenplay, but writing is the thing I want to get better at, and with school taking more time than ever, just writing the weekly post is gonna be tough. Anyway, thanks so much for stopping by and commenting!

  2. Jo-Anne Teal (@jtvancouver)

    27 August 2014 at 07:57

    Beautifully written. I really enjoyed this story and think it’s an excellent take on the prompt(s).

    • DragonSpark

      27 August 2014 at 21:04

      Why thank you! Glad you liked this little tale of mine. Always glad to see new faces in the comment section. Thanks for stopping by, and thanks for the compliment!

  3. Suzanne

    27 August 2014 at 17:02

    I love how fast-paced this is, and the way you bring the reader right into the pilot’s world. Great sci-fi world too! Was the Commander Carter reference a nod to Stargate or am I just a really big geek? Either way, this was a great read – and I’m happy to see you back at the speakeasy! 🙂

    • DragonSpark

      27 August 2014 at 21:15

      Thanks for the compliment. I’m gonna be an even bigger geek and admit this was indeed a nod to a great sci-fi character, but not the one you know (I’m a huge fan of SG-1. Did you watch Atlantis and the sadly discontinued Universe series? Those were awesome too!). It’s also the leader of Noble team, and one of the best written characters in a FPS game (Halo Reach for those interested).

      I’ll take advantage of this to let you know that the workload for school is quite heavy this year, so I may not be able to partake in this amazing weekly challenge regularly, and when I can, I might not get around to reading everything before Thursday. I’ll do my best, and try to make time, as this has been a great experience, and one I wanna continue. So I apologize in advance If I’m not as involved as during Summer…

      If you got to the end of this crazy comment, Congrats! Thanks so much for your weekly involvement, and for making us all better writers. ^_^

  4. mbarkersimpson

    28 August 2014 at 13:26

    I love the suit. You had me at the armoured suite! I enjoyed the pacing, the descriptions (which were so visual it was like a movie playing in my head). Great story 🙂

    • DragonSpark

      28 August 2014 at 21:00

      Yay! That’s basically what I was going for: Fancy robot in a very visual setting. So thanks a bunch for stopping by and commenting. It’s much appreciated! Glad you liked this!

  5. inNateJames

    28 August 2014 at 17:32

    Here’s to not turning into a milkshake when achieving sonic speed! Very well conceived situation here, DS, loved the mech armour. The heart rate check ins added a grounded and constancy to this otherwise crazy and terrible situation. It made me think the narrator is not human. Is that correct?

    • DragonSpark

      28 August 2014 at 21:16

      Haha Thanks for the compliment. I’m glad you liked it. The narrator isn’t human, not genetically anyway. He/she has received genetic augmentation at the embryonic stage, and has been trained as a supersolider/mech pilot since birth. Since his/her genes aren’t naturally generated, I guess you can say he/she isn’t technically human, more like a superhuman. You wouldn’t be able to tell by just looking, though. Might cause race issues beyond our ism pagination in the future. Then again, augmented genes may become necessary to live n a low gravity environment.

  6. Michael

    28 August 2014 at 19:26

    Oh, I loved the ending. I’m a big fan of Firefly myself, and this had several Fireflyeseque moments, like the narrator’s almost having hope of warning Earth, and then suddenly, wham, big alien space fleet. Very sad. And nicely done. 🙂

    • DragonSpark

      28 August 2014 at 21:18

      I actually never watched Firefly, apart from stumbling upon it while switching through channels. Anyway, thanks for stopping by!

  7. Blake

    28 August 2014 at 22:21

    In books I’m not really into hard SF (while in TV and films I am, although more Farscape than SG); but I enjoyed how you kept an emotional core to the story among all the techy details. It gave the scene a real edge.

    • DragonSpark

      29 August 2014 at 20:24

      Thanks, though I wasn’t aware of that. This wasn’t meant to be an emotional piece, but I’m glad you found something you like in the rubble of this lunar battlefield. Thanks for the comment!

  8. tedstrutz

    30 August 2014 at 07:31

    I did enjoy. Heartbroken… good ending. Well put together piece, DS.


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